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Soft Spoken (Episode 1)
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“Um, I’m gonna go play pool, so I will see you all later.” She said, walking away with the girl.
“Bye.” I said dejected.
“You shoulda hit on her when we first came in.” Harrison said. The whispered “There’s always plan number two!” and nodded at Alice. I ignored him.
“I don’t get it. I mean, what does Shane have that I don’t have?” I whined.
“It has to do with your attitude.” Alice said. What, she didn’t think I had attitude? Well fine!
“I’ve got attitude.” I said, pouting.
“It’s because she’s so withholding.” Marina added.
“No… it’s because she’s so confident.” Tina tried.
“No, it’s because she’s so stupid and stupid people are too dumb to be insecure.” I said grumpily.
“Dana… she’s your friend.” Alice said, resting a hand on my shoulder. Why’d she do that? Great, now I was over-analyzing everything.
“It’s confidence, okay? I’m telling you. It’s because of her nipples.” Tina continued. Jenny shifted next to Marina, starting to look uncomfortable.
“What do you mean it’s because of her nipples?” I asked.
“She has the best nipples in town and she knows it.” Tina explained.
“Oh, my god, you’re so right, she has nipple confidence!” Alice said excitedly, happy to have figured it out.
“They are nice.” Harrison chimed in.
“Yeah. They’re small and they’re perfectly formed.” Tina nodded.
“I wonder if I could sell a story on L.A.’s best nipple, because I —“ Alice was cut of by a laugh from Tina.
“Oh, that’d be good.”
“I think I’m just gonna wander around for a bit.” Jenny said quietly to Marina. Of course we all stopped talking to see what was up with the new girl.
“Are you alright?” Marina asked, concerned.
“Yeah, I’m good.” Jenny gathered her things and left the table. Alice and I exchanged amused glances as she was stopped in the middle of the room by a girl.
“Hi there.” The girl smiled invitingly. Jenny shook her head and waved her hands back and forth.
“No. Thank you.” She said, and made a quick exit for the door.
“Well if Jen doesn’t want her, I’ll take her!” I said. Alice gave me a weird look.
“You know what, guys, I think I’m gonna head out.” Tina said, standing up.
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Another great start! Before I couldn’t really see the chemistry between Dana and Alice before Tonya came along, but now ~thinking~ I may have to re-watch some things:) Also, were you still going to continue your other story? Cuz I’m really waiting on an update on it, but either way, I can’t wait for whatever’s next!
Great start. I really like it, and can’t wait to see what you have in store.
A fresh input onto the first series – really showing a great promise of a great posting – keep up the great work along with your other story.
I enjoyed the ride down memory lane – with your additions. It is easy to see that they could have been attracted to each other as early as the beginning of season 1. The scene outside of the club showed something was up.
Hey, it’s a good start but it would be nice to see you moving away from the show’s path a little bit more, putting in a little more insight into Dana and Alice’s feelings.
so far so good :) keep it up. it’s interesting how closely your are following the show. Can’t wait to see whats next.
Funny, I just watched this episode. :) I really like that you let us see both sides of the story. In my opinion, Alice and Dana did have some little thing going on since the epilot-episode! I’m curious how you fill in all the blanks (we didn’t get to seec on the show unfortunately!) which will lead to the first kiss at 4 a.m.
This is more like it. Still enough left to our imaginations, but a clear direction for our beloved Danish. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Ok, so I totally loved it. Please keep on with this story (and your other one!), because I think that this is going to be an awesome story! :-)
WOot woot i like!! thanks for the post!
Oh yes..I like! Please continue!
i like it! please post more soon!