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More Than a Feeling
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Alice’s eyes fluttered rapidly as she searched for an answer, and before she even realized what she was saying, she blurted out. “It’s an underwear party!”
Both cops just stared at her. Alice smiled nervously, pulling her robe belt tighter. “What?” Officer Charlie finally asked, smirking.
“I…I…” Alice stammered, laughing. How the fuck am I gonna get out of this one?
Inside, Carmen started to undress, much to the surprise of Shane, the only one who noticed. Tina, Dana, and Bette were still trying to clean the house. Shane’s eyes went wide, and a smile spread across her face. “What are you doing?” She couldn’t hide the excitement in her voice.
Carmen scoffed. “Helping her out.” She pulled her shirt over her head, exposing a black lacy bra. As she unbuttoned her jean shorts, she noticed the wide-eyed wonderment on Shane’s face. “Better take a picture…you’re only seeing this once.” She kicked her shoes off as she pulled her shorts off, revealing black bikini cut underwear. Crumpling her clothes, she shoved them into Shane’s chest. “Just stand there and keep quiet.”
“You’re telling me you’re having a…underwear party?” The older cop asked, turning to Officer Charlie. “What exactly does that mean?”
Suddenly, the door opened, and Alice quickly turned.
“Baby what are you–ooh!” Carmen said, opening the door wide enough to give both officers full view of her scantily clad body before nearly jumping behind it. “Officers! I-I thought you had gone!”
Both men stared at Carmen, their eyes as round as saucers. Carmen thought she saw a quick flash of desire on Officer Charlie’s face, but wasn’t sure. She was too busy trying to play embarrassed.
Alice did a double take to Carmen before turning back to the police officers. She threw up her hands in defeat. “What? We’re girls! We’re crazy!”
Tina walked over to Bette, as both girls finally noticed what was going on by the door. “What the hell is she doing?” She whispered, but Bette only shrugged, shaking her head.
“Listen, are you done here?” Carmen said. “We’re waiting!”
Suddenly, it dawned on Alice. She put her hands on her hips, and stared the large officer down. “Hey, hey I have rights. I know that. I don’t have to let you in!”
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Um, Bette’s wonderful because I’m pretty sure I wouldn’t have had the will power to stop! Tina’s just lucky she’s so cute (“I think I love you”)… great story, looking forward to the next post!
It is nice to see two young women taking their time to become more than lovers but life long friends. The hot and heavy stuff can come later when they are truely ready. Now, they should enjoy each others company. The longer they are together the more difficult it will become to stop the advances of either one of them.
Awesome story and chapter. Hope the studies went or are going well. Post soon. Thanks for taking the time.
YAY it’s fixed! *does half a happy dance due to lower back pain* OW! Anyway, I knew they wouldn’t get very far in their make-out session, but I’m glad you went there. At some point bounderies usually are made and I was happy to see that. Otherwise it’s like, “Okay we’re gonna make out for about 2 months and then BAM we’re doing it.” No gradual escalation or anything. Ths was definitely a story I couldn’t wait to read as soon as I got back home.=D
This chapter left me with a HUGE smile on my face and I’m feeling all warm inside…..so great and sweet this one. Please post soon – I’m addicted :o))
Why is it that the trouble this group always gets into reminds me of the gang in our younger years. Way to go Carmen. Gotta love B&T.
omfg first. lol. thi sis my favorit bt story. post fast.
Good to see you again Manda and this is good chapter. Glad that they not in trouble and Alice is funny and crazy, nice about Bette and Tina. OK post soon please, thanks!
Clarity in the house! This story is my kryptonite. Here’s why: So I was getting my fanfic reading on when sleep came a knockin’. It’s 3 AM, I’m extremely tired and was about to shut down my laptop when I saw that you posted. I said to myself, “Self, read this chapter tomorrow. You’re tired!” Alas, the pull was too strong. The end. Manda, I give you props for this well written story as well as the abundant TiBette make-out session. Your story is still (c’mon, say it with me) fanfuckingtastic! It cheered me up after a very, very, very…very bad week. Looking forward to the next chapter and I hope you kicked ass on your finals. Please post soon.
U TAKE WAY TOO LOAN TO UPDATE!!!!!!! And then u tease me…YYYYYY!!!!!!!
reading this made me all warm and fuzzy inside. thanks so much for sharing :)
I love this sweet story, it always makes me smile! Like the way your B and T aren’t rushing it. But actually they are moving really fast, considering the fact it took them like twenty chapters till the first kiss…Thanks Manda!
Nice continuation! And please don’t worry about replying to each of our comments individually… as far as I’m concerned you don’t need to bother commenting back… spend the time writing more chapters instead and we’ll be totally happy! ;-)
Very glad you’re back, this chappy was a nice one indeed, nice trick Carmen pulled out.
Yay, you are back! Man, they all still so young and sweet. lol… Love it. continue please
Awesome story Manda! I love how you show a young Bette and Tina connecting with each other. Nothing wrong with taking it slow. Please post again soon.
finally you’re back, this was absolutely wonderful
i have been waiting to read another chapter of your story but was worthy this chapter was so cute! i enjoy so much reading this B&T beginnig! continue post pleaseeee
Sweet. fun, sexy. What’s not to love? This story is so luscious and all the girls are heavenly.
sweet,sweet,sweet… *doing a happydance*
Praise the lord your back!! and here i thought my fav writer fell off the face of the earth! lol, manda, beautiful post…LOVE THIS STORY.