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Masked Feelings CH 75 There’s No Escape
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The knocking persisted. The dressing room attendant yells through the door that she’s coming in. They hear the key jiggle in the lock. Dana throws some of the clothes laying on the floor on top of Alice, but she didn’t have time to cover herself up before the attendant pushed the door open. The attendant stands in the doorway and sees the two women that were making all the ruckus. Dana and Alice looked like two little kids that were caught doing a big no-no. Alice was huddled in the corner on the bench while Dana was kneeling on the floor in front of her, naked.
The dressing room attendant glared at the both of them.
Attendant – I can only imagine what was going on here. There is a place and time for your fun little games and here is not one of them. Gather up your things and don’t come back again. You have 5 minutes and then I call security.
She closes the door behind her.
Dana – Damn….
Alice – That should be my line….
Dana – I’m sorry, babe. This is my fault.
Alice – I told the bitch to wait her turn.
Dana laughs.
Dana – Maybe she’s bitchy because she hasn’t gotten any service herself for a while.
Alice – That’s bad, Dana….
Dana – Awww come on… that was funny.
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David should’ve put on the respirator before he poured the acid all over her. It was possible to die from just the fumes. Breathing in hydrogen fluoride causes pulmonary edema which in basic terms meant that your lungs would fill up with fluid, causing one to drown or suffocate. He put the respirator on immediately after. The fumes were starting to burn his nose and eyes. There was a little bit left on the bottom of the jug and instead of wasting the rest, he poured what was left on her head. He watched as it trailed down her face.
He cleaned up his mess off the table, disposing it all into a large garbage bag. David wiped the place down clean, making sure to take care of any evidence he may have left… except the pool of acid sitting around Andrea’s feet. He was disappointed that he wasn’t going to be able to stick around and see what would happen to her body because of the acid. Maybe next time he’d be able to take someone back to his new workshop and see the results. Andrea was being left here for a reason.
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Damn, you leave me speechless. My mind went blank. The only word that’s in my head is: HOOOOOOOOOOOOOT! Truth to be told….I have to admit that this chapter made me melt. I felt every word you wrote. It was so fucking real. You exceeded all my expectations. Must have been a pretty awkward moment whenthe attendant walked on Alice and Dana. Hope it never happens to me, lol. Otherwise I’ll be blushing the rest of my life through, lol. Wish I wasthe attendant….I’d get to see Dana in action AND naked, lol. Yeah, I knowAndrea’s dead and that’s a big loss for my poor heart. I liked her a lot and now she’s gone:-((( Do you think they have a phone number in hell? lol Roxy’s numberunlisted? You have to be wrong about that. Or you just won’t tell and keep her all to yourself. That’sunderstandable though, lol. You think me bold in my speculations? Don’t know if I even started, lol. It makes you smile when you think of me begging? Guess, you just like to have slaves around you, lol. The scene in the car was beautifully written. Makes me want to take a ride with my better half. Damn, that was absolutely tremendous. Wish I could have your writing talent. So happy David is back again. Although he’s evil, immoral and his actions are unforeseeable I love his character. Not that I would like to meet him in person, lol. But his presence in this story gives me so much pleasure:-) I feel bad for him though ’cause he’s a loner. It would be so much better if he had someone to share those moments with. I’m certain, he likes having an audience or people admiring him and his ‘efforts’. That whole acid situation with Andrea was fucking wicked. Hope he doesn’t kill one of the main characters like Dana or Alice. Otherwise I’ll jump in this story and kill David with my bear hands. Need to lift some weights before I do that though, lol. You have me curious as to how Dana’s and Alice’s relationship is going to change. After this chapter I don’t want them to seperate anymore. Roxy needs to lay eyes on someone else. How special is special to get under your skin, hmmm? Does that mean I’m not special enough?:-( Loved the tub sex. I have no idea how you succeed to make me want to do the things you write. This chapter is my favorite of all the one’s you wrote till now. I value the hard work you put in every single chapter. You have my biggest respect and appreciation. This chapter left me more than just warm and fuzzy, lol. Seems like Roxy’s having no friends left now that Andrea’s dead. Hope she can deal with David somehow. I smell lots of revenge. I love your story, more with each chapter, darlin’. Please post soon. You know I’m greedy when it comes to your story. I’ll be waiting for your next installment….patiently. You’re amazing, lady!
That was brilliant!! I couldn’t have written it better myself, or at all for that matter. I love love love that my Danish was drama free this time around. Those two are just so freakin’ hot!! Loved Alice’s line: “Are you cold?” “Do you want me to turn up the heat?” I don’t think she could have turned it up any higher if she tried!! And the bath tub scene. I’m a sucker for tub/shower scenes and this was wonderful!! Is this moment of happiness between them the calm before yet another storm? If so I’m sure they will weather it just like all the others. Now on to other things: David is one sick bastard!! Wasn’t it enough that he poured acid all over her chest but he had to pour the remainder on her head? What a psycho!! Why the hell won’t Roxy give up? Alice wants Dana and she will always want Dana so move the hell on!! Hopefully David will do me a huge favor and take her out very slowly!! Didn’t hear about Kristen this time around. I hope I don’t have to add her to my list of people I loathe. She had better leave Dana alone and try to work it out with her husband or I’ll put in a call to David and have him handle it!! Anyway I’ll leave it at that and I’ll await the next post.
Alright, first things first. I know I’m a bit of a bastard for not leaving any comments recently, but not without good reason. That being said, I have immensely enjoyed the last three chapters. I know you sort of hit a wall with your writing prior to that and you weren’t feeling it as much as you once had, but I commend you for your longer lapses, because it has yielded much stronger writing. I can feel your passion for this story growing with each chapter and that is outstanding. I’ve always been a big fan of your work and I’m happy that I’m still on the edge of my seat reading this story as it unfolds in so many delicious ways. Now I have to say this this update was FUCKING HOT!!! I’m not going to say that you outdid yourself, because you know what chapter is my favorite, but damn you came close. The dressing room scene was quite amusing and certainly well written. I was all sorts of tense while reading the car scene … but you were going for tension, now weren’t you? When you had them pull into the parking garage, I wasn’t sure if you were going to have Alice relive her experience with Roxy through some freaking flashback sequence and was most pleased that you didn’t. It was about them and only them … as it should be. As for the bubble bath … you know I’m a sucker for shower/bath sex … so I don’t really need to go there … but I do have a think for clawfoot tubs and I don’t know if we have ever discussed that before. Very nice touch indeed. The playfulness with really what helped make this chapter wonderful. From getting caught in the dressing room to the teasing car ride and Dana climbing in the tub fully dressed … it helped to re-establish what make Danish fantastic. Goofy & sexy women that want to make sex fun and exciting. I see you trying establish a bit of sympathy for Roxy … I’m still not biting on that one. While it sucks that her friend is dead … they’re both snakes. David is sick bastard … but certainly keeps the plot suspenseful. Hope this makes up for my lack of posting.
brteyes, sorry to hear about your wrists. I am sure all of us would rather wait a little bit long for your incredible story than to have you further hurt yourself. I am elated to hear that you will keep writing Danish. I also have noticed the # of readers have dropped. However, there are still plenty of us who truly cares about Danish. Comes down to it, is the quality not quantity that counts. This long weekend had been great because you, Akiracolorblind, fripster, Luvs, MutedTempest, nbd14 & TwistedTales all posted. To be honest, I think it is ok with anywhere from 1 to 4 posts a day. I believe “Less is More.” I mean we will treasure each post more. Personally, I cannot possibly read more than that because I read relatively slowly and it takes me even longer to write the comment. I don’t know how you writers do it. 24 hours per day is not enough for me. Like I said before, it is the quality. All the current posts are fantastic. I swear I will do my part to support anything Danish. You are absolutely amazing with this story. Can’t praise you enough and don’t mind one bit even if the road to happy Danish land is long and winding. As for this chapter, A & D were sizzling hot from the car to the tub. I bet you could even fry an egg on water. One can never have enough of those 2 romantic cuties together. I second what Danalicious2 said about the writing talent. You certainly can bring any scenes alive even the very gruesome ones. On a more serious note, I am happy to see A & D showing their love to each other. Finally you told us the dark side of David. As grotesque as his killings were, I now can understand its origin and kind of felt bad for him. Having said that he would score a few points with me if he could just send Roxy, the pest to meet up with Andrea. Maybe he should notify Andrea that Roxy would be on her way by dialing the toll free number you gave out earlier. Love that. And I got one, David should get Roxy drunk and burn down her place not knowing that hideous Andrea/Dana tape was still inside. This way A & D would have one less danger. So would you please let David finish Roxy off. Please? brteyes, you managed to end the Labor Day weekend with a big BANG!!! Looking forward to your next installment and please look after your wrist. You do know typing on the keyboard won’t help, right? So take care!
It will be interesting how Andrea’s death will affect Roxy, will she get FBI or police involved or will she try to go it alone, when she gets emmotional also she gets sloppy. I also wonder what will she try to do with the tape now. At least Alice recognizes that Roxy’s presence does hinder her relationship with Dana. While Dana must learn to trust Alice for the relationship have real chance. Having someone around your SO who is always coming on to them and bad mouth you and your relationship isn’t good. pps
Bloody Hell, that was a fantastic piece of work – I’m speechless and begging for more please.
i know i am late to post a comment, but they do say better late then never.loved the chapter. the gore was gory and the sex was sexy. loved it!!! on to the next i go.